Good movie plot? its long needs work.......?

KNOW THIS IS LONG BUT PLEASE READ, I want to send this in to a movie producer as a suggestion for a movie! TITLE: CONCAVE, A Huge Meteor is heading for earth and there’s no way to stop it.< that’s the first plot but listen! NOW HERE IS THE MID-PLOT: Now the government must enact project safe-house, the people of the world do not yet know what danger is upon them (project safe-house is an underground city created by the government to for such a situation) the people of the world do not yet know what danger is upon them... the movie starts following the life of a middle aged man and his family (make the audience love his family) the government has been studying every human in the united states and the world under the patriot act. This study has revealed who is best for a survival situation and who is to be chosen to habitat the safe-house. ( in the movie make it seem like everyday activates are recorded by the government and even skin samples and stuff are obtained covertly by the government in igneous ways from people who they think may be "marked for survival" and the activates of the person are recorded and followed indefinably after a positive marked for survival human is found even if they are only 2 years old) if a person doesnt seem like a good survival rate at birth (the goverment test every newborn at the hospital secretly) they are no longer tracked, after a lifetime of the government following and sampling the middle aged mans skin samples and other samples left behind by like a soda can in the mall garbage or a hair brush at the salon, his DNA the government is sure that this man is one that is "marked for survival". A CIA operative knocks on the man’s door one morning and tells him that he must come with them at once! he goes, they take him to the secret floor of the pentagon ( where thousands of other people who have been chosen are, they brief the man about the whole situation and tell him that only humans that have certain genes are allowed to survive because of the high survival rate these genes happen to have, they tell him that only his kids can come and his wife does not have the genes, the kids were not marked for survival! meanwhile ( sometime later) the meteor hits the moon!, SCENE 1 two high school kids are making out in the car and watching the moon when they see it start to crack and crumble, SCENE 2 an old lady is taking out the garbage and is oblivious to the moon breaking apart right behind her. SCENE 3 (10 minutes later) boom! Its night time in NY the sound wave hits the earth! Everyone is waken up from their sleep and wonder what that noise was, it was loud! Cars alarms are going off and the people who just woke join the crowd that has formed as the moon started to break. The moon is in two pieces and is slowly (barley noticeable) floating toward earth, and sanity on earth is giving out. action scenes include: days later, floods, earthquakes, confused birds and animals, earth no longer rotating around the sun, huge tides ( because of no moon tide), people and things start to float, earth slows down spinning. next the half of the moon gets closer to the earth and you can see the craters on the moon its so close to hitting the earth.. The moon breaks through the atmosphere and a collision is near. The clouds part as the half of the moon heads for NY. The middle aged man must save his wife and get to the safe-house before its too late. The middle of the movie and the love story and all is up to you: ) lastly the earth really is damaged and the safe-house is protected....